Due to the rapid development and expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Yes, corporate companies are expanding globally not only in the grocery sector but in various industries too, Unfortunately,

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small-scale businesses. Particularly those are run by local entrepreneurs. Many of them struggle to compete and some are bankrupted. The rise of large

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Task Achievement

Expand on your main points with more detailed explanations and examples to strengthen your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

Make sure to provide a clear conclusion that summarizes your position and reinforces your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion

Improve logical flow by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly.

Task Achievement

You've identified a relevant issue regarding the impact of large corporations on local businesses.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

62 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

rapid expansion
compete
closure
death
local communities
wider range of products
convenience
unique character
personalized customer service
unemployment
job opportunities
traditional skills
craftsmanship
support
local economy
decline
community spirit

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