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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, some individuals believe that
professionals
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such
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 as doctors and engineers should pursue their professional
career
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careers
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 in their countries. Others argue that they should have the right to choose where they prefer to
work
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 whether it is in their own
country
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 or abroad.
Although
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 I firmly agree with the former perspective,
this
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 essay will discuss both views and address my opinion.
To begin
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 with, in our society, we believe that
professionals
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 who graduated from their own
country
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 are required to
work
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 within the
country
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.
This
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 is because some specific fields
such
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 as doctors receive part of tuition fees or
scholarship
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scholarships
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 from the government during their
study
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studies
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. As a result, they are tied with those funds and required to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they study within a certain period of time.
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, medical students in Thailand are supported by the government fund. It is mandatory for them to
work
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 and contribute in hospitals which are assigned once they
graduated
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 especially the
hospital
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hospitals
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 in the suburbs.
On the other hand
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, experts should be able to choose the place or
country
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 where they wish to continue their profession.
This
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 should be normalized and standardized all over the world as it is a basic right for humanity. Some
professionals
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 invest their money in private or top schools in order to have a better opportunity after they
graduated
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.
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, pursuing a professional career in another
country
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 can broaden their perspective and not limit their opportunity to earn a higher income, especially in developed countries. In conclusion,
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some
professionals
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 need to
work
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 in their own homeland
due to
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 their specific
requirement
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requirements
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. I believe that they should
also
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 have
a
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the
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 freedom to choose their own path where they desire to
work
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.

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task achievement
Expand on your arguments and provide more detailed supporting information to strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly links to the next to enhance the overall flow of the essay.
task achievement
Engage with counterarguments more fully to demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Clear articulation of both sides of the argument, which demonstrates an understanding of the issue.
coherence and cohesion
A good introduction and conclusion that frame your discussion well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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