The table shows information about the number of Australian people who visited the seven most popular destinations in 1999 and 2009.

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Displayed in the data table is the amount of Australian citizens who
traveled
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travelled

The spelling of traveled is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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in the seven different prevalent destination
counrtries
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countries

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during a period from 1999 to 2009.
Overall
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, China had become the country which achieved the most
growth
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

rate
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

,
while
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the statistics of all the other countries had increased either but varied
in
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at

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different
level
Fix the agreement mistake
levels

It seems that level may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. In 1999, China
had become
Wrong verb form
became

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the fifth most popular destination compared to its
last
Linking Words

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position in 2009, with a
dramatical
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dramatic

The word dramatical doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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visitor increase from 86,000 to 300,000 which achieved
2.5
Correct article usage
a 2.5

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times
growth
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

rate
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

.
Conversely
Linking Words

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,
Correct article usage
the

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UK and
US
Correct article usage
the US

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were still very popular for Australian visitors but didn't
saw
Wrong verb form
see

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an
Change the article
a

The article an may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word dramatical.

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dramatical
Replace the word
dramatic

The word dramatical doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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growth
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

rate
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, with only
60
Correct article usage
a 60

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% and 33%
growth
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

rate
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

respectively. Looking at the rest of the destinations, Fiji

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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