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The maps bellow show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps bellow show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the changes that have been made over the years in a
town
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 named Kimsville. It depicts the various additions and
relplacemts
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replacements
 done in the
town
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 during a certain time period.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
shopping
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the shopping
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centre
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 of
town
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 has stayed in
same
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the same
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 place
wheras
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where
whereas
old
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the old
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 cinema has been converted into a pub.
Moreover
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, new constructions
such
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 as a stadium, railway station and many more are done.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 new apartments are built in the north-west direction of the city
centre
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while
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 a new railway station is built in the West direction of the city
centre
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.
In addition
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, the factory in the East of the city
centre
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is
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has been
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 replaced by a software
comapny
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company
 in today's scenario.
However
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, the trees in the south-west of
town
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 are cut down, where a football stadium is made. The old cinema
of
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apply
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town
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 is converted into a pub
whereas
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 the shopping
centre
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 remained at
same
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the same
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 site over the years.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • modernization
  • transportation routes
  • green space
  • public facilities
  • community impact
  • environmental effect
  • historic preservation
  • architectural integration
  • urban planning
  • amenities
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