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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The map depicts the five
nutrients
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 and their proportions in a
medium baked
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medium-baked
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potato
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 and in
macaroni
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.
Overall
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, both dinners mostly
consists
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consist
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 of carbohydrates and proteins.
Whereas
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 the 'other
nutrients
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' category
hold
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 the smallest share in
macaroni
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,
potato
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 has a more evenly distributed consistency, with saturated fat accounting for the smallest percentage. In a
medium baked
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medium-baked
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potato
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, carbohydrates account for 35% of the total consistency.
This
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 is
then
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 closely followed by protein, at 25%. Glucose and 'other
nutrients
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' have the same proportions, each making up 15% of all
nutrients
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 in
this
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 dinner.
In contrast
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, saturated fat holds the least
significatn
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significant
 share of 10%.
Macaroni
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's consistency contains 52% of carbohydrates, making it the most abundant nutrient. Unlike
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potato
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potatoes
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,
macaroni
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 has much less protein, accounting for only 11%.
Likewise
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, glucose possesses the same
propotions
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proportions
proportion
,
whereas
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 saturated fat makes up 21% of the total. Other
nutrients
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 have
the
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a
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 smaller
propotion
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proportion
 of only 5% of the total.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, potato, macaroni with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional consistency
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fats
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • proportion
  • component
  • pie graph
  • comparison
  • significant
  • balance
  • healthy
  • dietary choices
  • implications
  • absent
  • presence
  • macro-nutrients
  • micro-nutrients
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