Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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changed in
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majority of people unanimously suggest that
children
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's free
time
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should be properly arranged by
parents
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while
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other
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argue by saying that
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should have
freedom
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to choose what they want to do in their free
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. I am in complete accord with
this
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point of fixing what
children
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will play. I will endeavour to shed some light on my both
viewpoint
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by giving
relevent
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reason
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with
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my opinion. On the
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hand,
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should do
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according to
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firstly
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angels should always
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what their child likes to do
according to
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that
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should
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and put them in
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class.
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, kid
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their
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school
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that in their free
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they can go to
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or go to some
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class to
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with growth
also
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meanwhile they will learn new
thing
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in life with fun
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also
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looking
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their health and
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we
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learn new
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not aware of.
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,
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their own which is good
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should
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that as
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as but in whole days given some
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in that
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can observe
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child. Not planning for
whole
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day after school make
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in their community with
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of 5 people but
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focus on
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activity
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so they will enjoy
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learning some
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activity
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guided teacher is there in class like in
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. In conclusion,
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children's
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with
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own
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but after
certain
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age and for
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some
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language
Work on the clarity and correctness of your sentences. Some sentences are difficult to understand due to grammatical errors.
task achievement
Ensure that you provide a balanced view by giving equal weight to each perspective before stating your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by using appropriate linking words and phrases.
content
You express a clear opinion on the topic, showing your stance on the issue.
task achievement
You attempt to provide examples to support your views, which is a good practice.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced development
  • expose children to
  • tailored activities
  • promote discipline
  • foster independence
  • genuine interests
  • free play
  • problem-solving skills
  • emotional well-being
  • unstructured time
  • personal exploration
  • structured activities
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