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Band 5.5

An Australian friend is coming to visit you and it will be his/her birthday during the vist write a letter to your friend Say how you feel about the visit Suggest what you could do on his/her birthday Ask what your friend thinks of this idea

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Dear Raman, I am doing great and I hope you are
aso
Correct your spelling
also
 doing well. When I
hear
Wrong verb form
heard
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 that you are
coming
Add the preposition
coming to
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 Brampton
in
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apply
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this
Linking Words
 summer, I
am
Wrong verb form
was
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 so happy and we will celebrate your
birthday
Use synonyms
 in August. Actually, I have already made a plan for your
birthday
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. One day before your
birthday
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, we will go
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to Nigara
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Nigara
Correct your spelling
Niagara
 Falls with our old friends and we will stay over
there
Correct your spelling
the
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 night
as well
Linking Words
as
Correct word choice
apply
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I will book
room
Add an article
a room
the room
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 for us.
After
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this
Linking Words
, we will do some adventure activities like bungee jumping during your
birthday
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 morning. I know, you mentioned
me
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to me
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last
Linking Words
 time you are getting mad
for
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about
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 bungee jumping. After all
Linking Words
this
Change the determiner
these
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 activities, we will come back
Brampton
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to Brampton
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 and we will
do
Verb problem
have
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 dinner in the famous Indian
restuarant
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restaurant
restaurants
as well as
Linking Words
 we will
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
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dance together. I hope you like my plan. Please let me know if you want to add or remove anything from
this
Linking Words
 plan. I can't wait to hear from you! See you soon, Your friend, Preet

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language accuracy
Make sure to check for minor spelling mistakes, such as 'aso' instead of 'also' and 'restuarant' instead of 'restaurant'. Correcting these will improve your overall impression.
coherence
Try to enhance the logical flow of your letter by clearly separating your feelings about the visit and the birthday plans into distinct sections. This will help in maintaining clarity.
content
You have conveyed your excitement about your friend's visit and included a detailed plan for the birthday, which shows thoughtfulness.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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