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With the advances in the field technology an incrasing number of people are now working from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working remotely.

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With the increased use of online communication platforms, more and more people are making the choice to work from home.
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 can cause some problems
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 as social isolation, the flexibility and economic advantages are clear.
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. The first benefit of it
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 to be the reduction of transport
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.
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, if a person turns his home into his personal office,
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 he does not have to spend money on transport and can save that money
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. Another positive aspect is thought to be flexibility.
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 is because the worker no longer has to restrict themselves to the rigid
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 of most offices and choose working hours to suit their life
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 their job.
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, despite
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 positives, distance working might have some inevitable drawbacks. One of the major disadvantages of it is that it can be quite lonely.
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, when at
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, a person can communicate and
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fun with coworkers and colleagues, but working all day without access to them can be quite stressful. Another important demerit is that you need a lot of self-discipline.
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 is because getting up and focusing on work every day
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 a great deal of self-discipline and motivation, which
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 in many people. In conclusion, despite the possibility of feeling, lonely, there are far more benefits
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 working from home. By offering the worker greater flexibility
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 minimizing personal
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, it is clear why so many people make the choice to work in
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 way.

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language
Ensure to proofread your work for spelling errors (e.g., 'increasing', 'expenses', 'rigidity').
structure
Make your main points clearer by using distinct topic sentences for each paragraph. This helps guide the reader through your ideas more effectively.
detail
Expand on the examples to provide a more comprehensive understanding of your points. For instance, include more specific scenarios or data regarding remote work benefits and drawbacks.
content
You provide a balanced view, addressing both advantages and disadvantages thoughtfully.
structure
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay, reinforcing your opinion clearly.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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