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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 20072011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 20072011 and 2015.
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The bar chart below compares five households by their annual
income
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 in 2017, 2011 and 2015 in
US
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the US
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.
Overall
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, it was clear that the fourth house
household
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 in
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this
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these
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 5 houses was always at the lowest level. The
third
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household
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 of
US
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the US
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 remained unchanged in
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this
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these
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 three years.
Beside
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Besides
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 the fourth
household
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, other annual
income
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viewed
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apply
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dropped in 2011.
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However
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However,
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 later rose in 2015 which was higher than their initial annual
income
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 in 2007. The fifth
household
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was at
Verb problem
had
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 the highest annual
income
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 in 2007 at about 29
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millions
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million
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,
then
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 dropped
at
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to
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 around 27
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millions
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million
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 which
become
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became
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 the
third
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 highest annual
income
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,
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finally
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and finally
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return
Wrong verb form
returned
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the
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to the
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 top of
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this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 five households at 33
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millions
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million
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 in 2015. The
second
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household
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 was approximately
at
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apply
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26
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millions
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million
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, but in 2011 rose at 30
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millions
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million
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that
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which
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 became the highest annual
income
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. In 2015, the
second
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household
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 had a lightly deceased to 28
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millions
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million
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, which returned the
second
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 place. The first
household
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 was about 25
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millions
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million
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 at 7, which was
at
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apply
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the
third
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 highest annual
income
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.
Then
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 increased in 2011
that
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and
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 reached 28
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millions
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million
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 which became the
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second highest
Add a hyphen
second-highest
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 annual
income
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. Later in 2015, returned to the
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third highest
Add a hyphen
third-highest
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income
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which
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apply
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at 27
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millions
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million
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. The
third
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household
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was remained
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remained
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 at 22
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millions
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million
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 in 2007, 2011,
2015
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and 2015
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, which was the fourth annual
income
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 of five households.
Lastly
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, the fourth bar was at 14
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millions
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million
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 at the beginning and
then
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 dropped to 13
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millions
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million
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 in 2011. In final, inclined to 15
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millions
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million
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 in 2015.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, household, third, millions, second with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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