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Many believe that learning a language at an early age is better while others think such language should be taught later. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Native speech plays a vital role in communicating and
express
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expressing
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 our
view-points
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viewpoints
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 in front of others. our learning
is totally depends
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totally depends
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 on
congnition
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cognition
, interest, and
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efforts
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. Some
people
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thought
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think
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 that
young
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a young
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age
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 is crucial to
learn
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learning
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 new
things
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 but others have
different
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a different
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 point of view. I am going to discuss
about
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both statements
along with
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 my opinion in upcoming paragraphs. To commence, children are like
to
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clay and a teacher can mould them in any direction. It means that infancy
age
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 is free from tension and stress
abour
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about
career
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their career
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 and they can spend
alot
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a lot
 of
time
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to grap
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learning
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 new
things
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such
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 as
mother
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their mother
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 tongue.
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, youth
is
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are
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 more energetic and positive towards new
things
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 and they invest their
precsious
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precious
time
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 and energy to achieve their goals within
limited
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the limited
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time
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 period.
Thereafter
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, language totally depends on pronunciation and way of
talk
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talking
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.
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age
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 children have
huge
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a huge
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 capacity to learn
pronunciation
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the pronunciation
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 and meaning of words as comparatively later
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 population. On
other
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the other
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 side, old
age
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people
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 have experience about
eveything
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everything
 and they just spend their
efforts
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 on important
things
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. In simple
words
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words,
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 they show interest
to acquire
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in acquiring
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a
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apply
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knowledge of vital
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 and do not waste their
time
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 on everything because they have
good
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a good
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 command of understanding which needs to
clarify
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 or not to survive properly.
Last
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 but not least,
people
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 of later
age
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 try to learn thing after using their life experience
that is
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 why
theacher
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teachers
teacher
 need to make
less
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fewer
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efforts
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 and power to teach them. It is
good
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a good
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 idea to save spirit and clear their doubts. In
ny
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my
 opinion, a person should have
crusioty
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custody
 and ambition to
grap
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gain
 knowledge of different topics. If a person is ready to utilize his comfort zone and animation
then
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age
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 does not matter they can learn anything
in
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at
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 any
age
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 period.
To conclude
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, early
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 children are in
free
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a free
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 mind they do
have
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not have
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 any stress so they can
give
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make
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their
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a
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 good
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efforts
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effort
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 to learn. But we can not underestimate
power
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the power
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 of older
age
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becuase
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because
 they have more experience
as
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apply
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compared to
little
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young
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age
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people
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas between and within paragraphs. Make clearer connections between sentences and use transition phrases to help guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
Make sure to provide more specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing to the reader.
language quality
Pay attention to grammar and spelling errors. Proofreading your work can help reduce these minor mistakes that can affect the overall impression of your writing.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states the topic and indicates that you will discuss both views, which sets a solid foundation for your essay.
task achievement
You have expressed your opinion clearly, which is important for fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
Your use of metaphors, such as comparing children to clay, adds a creative touch to your writing.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mimic
  • cognitive abilities
  • nuances
  • surface-level understanding
  • sophisticated learning strategies
  • critical thinking skills
  • intrinsic motivation
  • analytical skills
  • flexibility
  • sponge-like
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