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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of tree metals during 2014

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of tree metals during 2014
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The line graph provides information about the
every
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month
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 changes in the price of three metals, namely copper, nickel and zinc in 2014.
Overall
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, nickel reached the highest and lowest
percentage
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 among metals,
whereas
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 copper and zinc experienced slight fluctuation during the
period
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. It is shown by the graph that at the beginning of the
period
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 the cost
change
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 of the nickel reached the highest point accounting for 6%. After a sudden
decrease
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 it was a
period
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 of stability between March and May,
then
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 the
percentage
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 sharply
droppe
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dropped
 d and in June reached its lowest point that made up -3%. After the rapid
raise
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 followed by a
period
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 of constancy that lasted 3 months. In October the
change
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 in price slightly dropped to -2% and
stabilize
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 at the beginning of the autumn Regarding Cooper, in January the
change
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 in price constituted 2% after the
percentage
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 slightly went down and from March to June had a plateau. After a gentle
rise
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 the
change
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 in cost accounted for 1% for three
month
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 and in December the
percentage
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 was just over 1%. Meantime the cost
change
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 in zinc reached its highest point in February made up 3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, period, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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