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Band 1.5

Higher education can be funded in several ways including the following future: All costs are paid by the government All costs are paid by the student All costs are paid by the student using loans from the government that must be repaid after graduation Discuss the benefits of each option. Which is the best one?

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the map below illustrates the
sugesstion
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 of a proposed new city with seven different facilities
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 as the Bus stand and industries.
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,
it is clear that
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 the map planned as four quarters includes operations and several houses.
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, many places gathered the central part of
this
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 town
exept
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except
 the industries.
to begin
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 with, there are two industries that
surrounded
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are surrounded
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 by both regular and ring roads on the
noth
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north
 and south
side
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.
in addition
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, the four roads end in a Big
cyrcle
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circle
cycle
 in the central region of the town.
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, it is noticeable that every couple of houses
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are besides
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besides
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 each other in all parts.
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, the recreational areas are located in three different locations and the total number is five areas among two living places and three in vital regions.

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Try to improve the clarity of your introduction by clearly stating what the map represents and summarizing the key features in a more structured manner.
coherence cohesion
Work on using consistent tense and grammar throughout your essay. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and punctuation to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure to use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to avoid repetition and keep the reader engaged.
task achievement
You provided a general overview of the city layout, indicating the presence of different facilities.
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Your essay includes an attempt to categorize and analyze the facilities, showing awareness of the map's design.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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