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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience to support your arguments

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In the past most
students
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 prefer to study in their own countries for higher
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, today most
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 choose abroad countries for their
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 for bigger opportunities. Studying abroad
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 both positive and negative sides, which will be discussed in the essay.
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 with, the major advantage of studying abroad is that they can gain different exposure to the culture, and they can learn different traditions, languages, and lifestyles, which helps them to become more productive in their career,
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, a student from Mongolia is studying in Italy for higher
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 where they can acquire skills of Italian culture and customs.
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 help them to build their international connections which will be useful to their careers in the future. Another benefit is that
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 move abroad because
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 the better quality of
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. Some universities provide major facilities like labs and learning modules.
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, medical
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 who are pursuing in those countries have practical labs and simulations.
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, they can improve their knowledge and skills to acquire jobs in
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 competitive world.
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, The major disadvantage is funding for their tuition fees, and accommodation as the cost is so high that pupils depend upon financial institutions or parents to help them with their funding which leads to financial stress for families. another disadvantage is cultural shock and loneliness which affects academic performance and mental wellbeing.
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 need to manage their part-time jobs.
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, Studying abroad provides
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 with quality
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 considering cultural experience.
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, it
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 many challenges of high fees and cost of living. so
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 need to think twice before making decisions.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Academic mobility
  • Cross-cultural
  • Language proficiency
  • Internationalization of education
  • Diaspora
  • Expat community
  • Pedagogic methodologies
  • Cultural literacy
  • Foreign academic credentials
  • Educational disparity
  • Repatriation
  • Xenophobia
  • Ethnocentric perspectives
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