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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period
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The diagram
illustrate
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 the have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960
Overall
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, in 1960, the Queen Mary Hospital was
more
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a more
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 public area, but during
next
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the next
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 20-40
year
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years
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 increased medical centres. Hospital and
Car
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 parking never removed in 3 years. In 1980,
shopping
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the shopping
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 centre was demolished and gave way to
Pharmacy
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a Pharmacy
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.
Pharmacy
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The pharmacy
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 was located near to
hospital
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the hospital
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.
The
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 left side of
Pharmacy
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the Pharmacy
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 was constructed
new
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a new
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 cancer centre, the comparison of
nineteen-sixth
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the nineteen-sixth
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 map and
ninety-eighth
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the ninety-eighth
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 map reveals
change
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the change
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Farmland
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from Farmland
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 to
Nursing
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a Nursing
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 school. In 1980
have
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there were
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 more medical centres than
1960
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in 1960
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. In 2000
have
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apply
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many changed buildings.
Area
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The area
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 of
Car
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 parking
was
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apply
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decreased approximately 2 times
compare
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compared
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 with 1980.
Left
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The left
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 side of
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Car
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the Car
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 parking was constructed new Nursing school to
old
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the old
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Car
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parking’s
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parking
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 area.
Old
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The old
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 nursing school was knocked down and gave way to
Cancer
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the Cancer
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centre
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Centre
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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