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For the past year, you have been a member of a club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: -State what type of membership you have and how to you have paid for this -Give details of how you have benefited from the club. -Explain why you want to leave

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Hope You Are doing well, My name is Jass
kaur
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. I am writing
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 letter to inform you about my decision to quit your prestigious club's
membership
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.
Actually
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i
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 have been enjoying your
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 of yoga class.
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 year I took
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membership
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 and paid $200 via credit card.
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i
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 want to continue, my circumstances do not allow me to do it. In the context of
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
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membership
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,
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 have
experience
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my
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that my
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mentall
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mental
mentally
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physically
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 health has improved.
i
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 always feel energetic whenever
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 do professional or personal work.
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Lastly
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i
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 can proudly say that the
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 condition of my life has ameliorated. Now
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 want to leave
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membership
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 as
,
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i m
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i'm
 going to relocate to another city owing to my work transfer.
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this
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i
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 can not come to
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 club.
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 hope you will understand my situation. yours faithfully, jatinder.

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language
Make sure to use proper capitalization for names and at the beginning of sentences. For example, 'I' should always be uppercase.
coherence
Try to organize your points more clearly by separating them into distinct paragraphs that correspond to each question in the prompt.
tone
More formal language would be appropriate in a letter to a club secretary. Consider replacing phrases like 'I want to leave' with 'I regret to inform you that I must discontinue my membership.'
task achievement
You clearly communicated your decision to leave the club and provided a reason, which is important for task achievement.
tone
The letter has a friendly tone, which is a positive aspect when addressing a club secretary.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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