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The graphs show the tourist number to Australia and types of travels among three nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show the tourist number to Australia and types of travels among three nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
compared
Wrong verb form
compares
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 the
number
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 of three countries
people
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travel
Wrong verb form
travelled
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 to Australia in 1995 and 2000
years
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. And the line chart
showed
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shows
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 the change
of
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in
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 two types of
people
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have
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who have
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a
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travel
a journey
a trip
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travel
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in
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from
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 1995 to 2005
years
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 holidays from
Linking Words
this countries
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this country
these countries
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:
UK
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the UK
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, USA and
Japanese
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Japan
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.
Accroading
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According
 to the bar chart,
it's
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apply
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clearly
illustrated
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apply
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Japanese tourists to Australia
have
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had
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 the biggest part in 1995, about 1.4
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billions
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billion
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.
Linking Words
However
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However,
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 in 2000, only about 700
thousands
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thousand
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people
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choose
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chose
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travel
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to travel
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 to AU. And
then
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,
people
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 from
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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have
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had
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 a similar
number
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 about 13000000 in 2000. In 1995, only over 400
thousands
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thousand
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 USA
people
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travel
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travelled
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 to Australia, but the
number
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 in 2000
have
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has
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 been bigger than the
last
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 over 900
thousands
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thousand
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. From the line graph, the
backpacking
Correct quantifier usage
number of backpacking
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people
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are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased from 3
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billions
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billion
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 to 6
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billions
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billion
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 between 1995 to
2005
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the 2005
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 year.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the
people
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 who have a
travel
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agrency
Correct your spelling
agency
 holiday are
flucuntering
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fluttering
 in the 10
years
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.
In
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From
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 1995 to 2000, the
number
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grow
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grew
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up
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apply
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from about 9
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billions
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billion
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 to 15
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billions
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billion
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. But
in
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from
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 2000 to 2005, the
number
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 of
people
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 decreased
about
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by about
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 8
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billions
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billion
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.
It's
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It
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 may be related to the Japanese tourists
grow down
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growth
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 in the
5
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past 5
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years
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, travel, years, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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