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The pei charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.

The pei charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.
The
pei
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pie
 chart illustrates the percentage of
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fishes
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fish
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 imported into the United
State
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States
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 from Canada,
China
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 and other
countries
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 and
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overall
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the overall
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 total value in billions of dollars from 1988 to 2000.
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, throughout the years, the number of
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fishes
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fish
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 transported to
US
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the US
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 by the other
countries
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 and
China
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dublicated
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duplicated
,
as well as
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 the total cost of
fish
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 transportation. In 1988, Canada
acoounted
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accounted
 for over 60% of US
fish
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 transportation,
However
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,
China
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 and other
countries
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 accounted
only
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for only
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 13% and 27% respectively, which only cost US 6.57 billion dollars
at
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in
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 that year. Five years later, Other
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countries
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country's
countries'
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fish
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 importation to
US
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the US
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 increased up to 46%.
Similarly
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,
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China
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China's
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 importation of
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fishes
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fish
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 rose by 7%. In 2000, it
costs
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cost
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 the US to transport the
fish
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 into the country
a
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apply
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10.72 billion dollars, with around 40% of the
cose
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cost
case
goes
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going
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 to the other
countries
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.
In addition
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, 30% of US
source
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sources
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 of
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fishes
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fish
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 goes to
China
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, and Canada declined by half of their percentage
un
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in
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 1988.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fishes, china, countries, fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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