The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
percentage
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of the people living in cities in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand, and Indonesia during the period of 1970 to 2020, with future numbers for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, it is apparent that all four countries saw an increase in
number
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a number
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of
indviduals
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individuals
living in cities from when they started the period, and will continue to rise in the future, with
Malaysia
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having the highest
percentage
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. As for
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Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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they started with 30% in 1970 and the
line
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grew and ended with predictions of 80% in 2040, which is the greatest number of people living in towns out of the four countries.
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, Indonesia began in 1970 with the lowest number which is just above 10%;
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, it boomed till it reached approximately 50% and it will hit 60% in 2040, which makes it the second highest
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after
Malaysia
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. Turning over to the Philippines, their
line
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experienced rise and fall, they had the highest
percentage
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in 1970 which was around 30%;
nonetheless
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, the
line
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skyrocketed to just under 50% in 1990 and plunged in the following two decades to around 40%.
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, it is predicted to grow and reach around 52% in 2040.
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, Thailand`s city population
line
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saw some fluctuations, beginning with just under 20% in 1970 it steadily rose and from 1990
till
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2020 the
line
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plateaued;
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, it is promised to see an increase
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just under 50% in 2040.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, malaysia, line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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