The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who travel to Australia in 2005 and 2015. The graph below shows the number of tourists who use two types for holiday.

The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who travel to Australia in 2005 and 2015. The graph below shows the number of tourists who use two types for holiday.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who travel to Australia in 2005 and 2015. The graph below shows the number of tourists who use two types for holiday.
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The bar graph and line chart illustrate the
number
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of visitors from the US, UK and Japan who came to Australia and the kinds of vacations they enjoyed in 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, it is evident that the majority of tourists came from the US and UK in the
last
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year
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,
while
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more Japanese people visited in the first
year
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.
Whereas
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, the
number
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of visitors
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who enjoyed
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enjoyed
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backpacking holidays increased over time. By observing the chart, it can be seen that in 2005, 800,000 residents from the United Kingdom travelled to Australia, which surged to 1,400,000 in 2015. Whilst, the
number
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of travellers from the US was more than 400,000 in 2005, which significantly reached over 1,400,000 in the later
year
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.
However
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, the preference of Japanese people to visit Australia decreased in 2015 to 1,000,000 and 1,400,000 in 2005.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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of people
for
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on
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backpacking holidays was less than 500,000 in the initial
year
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, which gradually grew to more than 1,000,000 in 2015.
However
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, the
number
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of staying at
resort
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the resort
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was 1,600,000 in 2005, which
inclined
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increased
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for the next five years and
then
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declined to 1,000,000 in 2015.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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