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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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The problem of whether or not
languages
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 should be fewer in the world has sparked a heated debate.
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 some people argue that the difference in a lot of
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 to some problems in communication, I contend that it would have a positive impact on
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identity
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the identity
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 of
countries
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. There are several reasons why individuals claim that life will be easier if there are fewer
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 in the world with
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 main one being that it helps to communicate with society from other
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.
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, today a lot of workers have online jobs and if
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most of them speak in same
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 connection between them will be stronger.
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,
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 conducted by Nazarbaev
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, about
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 of students from Kazakhstan
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 think that
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 should be
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 types of
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. I personally believe that saving the
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 is relatively
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positive
 for several reasons which are related
identity
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 and spiritual values of
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,
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 out of
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 could lead to losing spiritual values and
identity
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,
countries
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 that change their native
language
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 could lose their
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, because
language
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 is one of the main parts of cultural
identity
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.
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particularly
 undesirable because it would result in losing cultural
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 and chaotic
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 among all humans.
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, considering both
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 and cons of
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 out, it is significant for global communication.
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, all
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wants
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 to save their
language
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, because it is crucial when it comes to cultural
identity
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introduction
Consider developing your introduction by briefly summarizing both sides of the argument before stating your opinion. This will provide a clearer context for your stance.
coherence
Make sure to clearly link your ideas in each paragraph to the main argument. For example, clarify how the loss of languages directly relates to cultural identity in a more explicit manner.
supporting points
Use additional specific examples to strengthen your arguments. This will enhance the quality of your points and provide more comprehensive support for your perspective.
thesis statement
You presented a clear opinion regarding the importance of language preservation, which is essential in argumentative essays.
argument development
Your essay includes relevant points discussing both sides of the language debate, showcasing a balanced consideration of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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