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A friend is expecting you to stay with him in two weeks’ time, but unfortunately you forgot that you have a business trip at the same time. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Apologise and say that you cannot come to visit. -Explain why you will not be able to visit. -Suggest another time that you could visit.

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Dear Sumita, I hope you are doing splendidly! It's been a long time since we caught each other. I'm very excited to meet you at your place, but
unfortunately
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 I'm not able to come there. I
feels
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 like down in the dumps because we
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meet
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 each other
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last
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 2 years. The reason behind it's my business trip that my manager organized for us
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 the same week. Even I talked to my boss regarding the travel but he refused my offer because he really wants me to present the presentation of our new project. I'm really sorry for it, we will definitely patch up after my event and make a trip of one week. We will explore some new places and will capture remarkable memories. I am eagerly waiting for it. Lots of love Manjinder Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Try to keep your language consistent; for example, avoid switching between present and past tenses without a clear reason.
task achievement
Make sure to elaborate more on your feelings and suggestions, possibly providing specific dates for future visits.
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Your opening greeting is warm and inviting, setting a friendly tone for the letter.
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You effectively expressed your apology and provided a clear reason for your inability to visit.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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