In many countries people are having health problems because they choose to live an unhealthy life. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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One of the most pressing topics in today’s time is majority of the people in

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different parts of the world are

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ignorant about their lifestyle and fitness

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their choices. I strongly believe that people should take care

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their health by dedicating their time and efforts

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workouts, healthy habits and a

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diet. In

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essay, I will demonstrate the causes and how different approaches that can be taken to solve the serious

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Provide specific examples to support your ideas, especially in the body paragraphs. More detailed explanations of the causes and solutions would enhance your argument.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph contains distinct main points that are clearly linked to your thesis statement. Avoid blending too many ideas in one paragraph for better clarity.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction could be more concise and directly connected to the main arguments you will present. Consider revising to clearly outline the reasons and solutions in a straightforward manner.

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The awareness of the health issues related to lifestyle choices is effectively communicated in your introduction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

81 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
dietary habits
awareness
convenience
accessibility
lifestyle
unhealthy choices
stress
busy lifestyles
cultural factors
government intervention
policies
education campaigns
nutrition
physical activity
exercise
supportive environment

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In many countries people are having health problems because they choose to live an unhealthy life. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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