The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The pie charts demonstrate the comparisons in the mean of family expenses for five different purposes, including housing, transport, food, health care, and other goods and services, in two different Asia countries (Japan and
Malaysia
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) in 2010.
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, housing accounted for the massive majority of the costs in
Malaysia
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,
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Japanese households spent mostly on other goods and services. Interestingly, families in both regions expensed the least for medical purposes. It can be clearly seen from the figures, that other goods and services made up the largest percentage (29%)
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Japanese yearly expenditures.
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, housing stood at the first place of annual cost with 34% in
Malaysia
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.
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, spending on food occupied the second rank in both Japan and
Malaysia
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(24% and 27%, respectively). Unexpectedly, health care made up the lowest proportion of yearly family costs in both areas, even if the percentage of
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in Japan, at 6%, was twofold higher, compared with 3% in
Malaysia
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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