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Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some that
present
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time
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 is best to focus on, looking at
future
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the future
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 and preparing for it is
misuse
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a misuse
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 of
time
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. I completely agree with
this
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 statement as any achievements perceived are in the current
time
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 only,
noone
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no one
 receives them tomorrow.
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 with, some people are based on the facts that now is not the
time
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 to complete or be ready for any task and they start leaving on next day. It has been observed that they lack fulfilling their part on
time
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 as when
second
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the second
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 day comes they again say, they can accomplish them tomorrow. So, that
stike
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style
 makes them weak in terms of life and they live a
litte
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little
backwards
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 than the others.
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, if any sort of thing is being completed today itself it gives back results on
time
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 rather than focusing on hope of another day.
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 to
this
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, after some
research
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 it has been found
out
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apply
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that thinking
on
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in
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present
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the present
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 makes individuals more vivid and confident towards the decisions they
take
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make
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. They become more productive and problem
solver
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solvers
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 as they deal with
time
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 right away.
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, it is significant that they plan presently.
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,
while
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 thinking about
future
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the future
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 people tend to make things wrong.
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, a couple of workers at a certain location found out, they finished their jobs incorrectly as they were busy pondering about their coming
time
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.
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, it is more important that preference is given to
current
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the current
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 zone. In conclusion,
time
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 moves at a steady pace,
althought
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although
 it is difficult to cope with it
as
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in
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 some situations like thinking about
coming
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the coming
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 days
while
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 performing work but, concentrating on
present
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the present
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 makes more jobs productive and finished on
time
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.

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task achievement
Clarify your thesis statement to make your position more explicit. For instance, mention why focusing on the present is crucial in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and links back to your thesis; this will improve overall coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance engagement and clarity.
task achievement
You have presented a clear stance on the topic, expressing your agreement with focusing on the present.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed, reinforcing your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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