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The chart below shows information about fuel used in the transport sector in different countries in Europe, compared to the EU average, in 2009 and 2010.

The chart below shows information about fuel used in the transport sector in different countries in Europe, compared to the EU average, in 2009 and 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
fuel
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consumption
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 in the transport sector across six European Union (
EU
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) countries, compared to the
EU
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 average, in 2009 and 2010.
Overall
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, Slovakia had the highest
fuel
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consumption
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,
while
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 Greece recorded the lowest.
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, the average
fuel
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usage
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 across the
EU
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 declined in 2010. In 2009, Slovakia had the highest
fuel
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consumption
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, at just under 9%, but
this
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 figure dropped significantly to approximately 6.5% in 2010. Austria maintained a stable
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 rate of around 5% in both years.
In contrast
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,
fuel
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consumption
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 in Italy increased slightly from around 4.5% in 2009 to approximately 5% in 2010.
Similarly
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, Greece saw a modest rise in
fuel
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usage
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, growing from 1% to about 2% over the period.
On the other hand
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, the
EU
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 average
fuel
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consumption
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 showed a downward trend. In 2009, the
EU
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’s
overall
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fuel
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usage
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 stood at 6%, which decreased to around 5% the following year. In summary,
fuel
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consumption
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 varied significantly among the six countries. Slovakia consistently consumed much more
fuel
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 than the
EU
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 average,
while
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 Greece remained well below the regional benchmark

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, consumption, eu, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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