Task one : The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Task one : The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for Task one : The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The data below provide
as with
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apply
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the
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apply
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information about how families in one country
spend
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spent
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their money weekly
in
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apply
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between 1968 and 2018
First
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First,
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we can see a huge amount of residents spending their money on food in 1968 with %35 of their weekly
income
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.
whereas
Linking Words
people
on
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in
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2018
they
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apply
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spent between %15 and %20 on food. People on 2018
their
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the
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most spent money is on leisure with a degree between %20 and %30 . In spite of families
on
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in
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1968
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1968,
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they spent a number between %5 and %10 on leisure .
Secondly
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, We can see that housing wasn't really popular in 1968 with only %10 of weekly
income
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but it
become
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became
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more popular in 2018
that
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when
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the number
increase
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increased
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between %5 to %
10
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and 10
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more . Clothing and
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footwear
footware
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footwear
was
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were
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a thing in 1968
that
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and
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families spent about %10 of their weekly
income
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but it
become
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became
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less popular in 2018 the number
decrease
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decreased
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to %5 of
people
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people's
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weekly
income
Use synonyms
spending

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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