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The increasing use of packaging, especially plastic packaging, has become a common practice in the modern consumer market. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of packaging.

In today's rapidly evolving world, packaging
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using
plastic
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 stuff
becomes
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a
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quite common. The topic of inclining in the usage of
plastic
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 has sparked a widespread debate and a
myraid
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myriad
 of opinions, with
plastic
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 being a prevalent issue in society. It is imperative to examine its
advantages
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 and disadvantages in a comprehensive manner.
One
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 of the key benefits of
utilization
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the utilization
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 of
plastic
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 for packing is
convenience
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a convenience
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 that it offers.  
This
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 is because
,
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plastic
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 is made up
with
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 much
more
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cheaper
material
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materials
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 than its alternatives
such
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 as metal and glass.
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, it is extremely cost-effective for people to use.
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Furthermore
, It is not only lightweight but
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versatile to utilize, which is
one
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 of the main evident
advantages
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 behind its popularity, as it can be easily
molded
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one
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to
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 another size as per the requirement.
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, there is a multitude of
advantages
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 associated with
plastic
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 including durability, flexibility and, ultimate energy-saving.
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,
over reliance
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 on
plastic
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 wrapping presents a lot of challenges, with
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 significant drawback
is
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 that
as
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plastic
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 waste dumped into the ocean poses a
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 threat to marine life because many sea creatures mistakenly ingest
plastic
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, leading to serious health issues or even deaths. Undoubtedly,
excessive
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an excessive
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 gathering of
plastic
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 pollutes beaches, not only
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 the coastal areas but
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contribute
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 to habitat depletion and
bio diversity
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biodiversity
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 loss.
However
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, it is essential to acknowledge the potential downsides of
plastics
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plastic
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 packaging particularly exemplified by
threatening
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 to aquatic species and to environment because of
emission
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the emission
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 of harmful gases from the
plastic
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 debris.
To conclude
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, evaluating the
advantages
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 and disadvantages of covering products by using
plastic
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 materials reveals a complex and multifaceted issue.
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this
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 packaging
undoubtedly
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 extremely useful
due to
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 its accessibility and ease.
However
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, they
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 present ecological dilemmas leading to
threat
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threats
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 to living
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 non-living things.

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Task Achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of plastic packaging; however, it could benefit from a more in-depth exploration of points, especially in the disadvantages section. Ensure to provide specific examples to strengthen your arguments more convincingly.
Coherence and Cohesion
There are minor coherence issues in the flow of ideas. Work on the transitions between points and ensure that each paragraph clearly follows from the last. A clearer linking between disadvantages and their implications could enhance the logical structure.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to clarity and grammar. Review sentences for clarity; for instance, phrases like 'made up with much more cheaper material' can be clearer as 'made from much cheaper materials'. This will ensure your ideas are communicated effectively.
Positive
Your introduction clearly sets the context for discussing the topic and is engaging. You successfully highlight the importance of examining the advantages and disadvantages of plastic packaging.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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