The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in their lives? Do you think this is a good thing?

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In the present time,
people
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living a usual
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and being successful, attract more attention from the media.
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draws attention towards the fact that success
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depend upon your social background or where you come from, but on your willpower, perseverance and perspective. I think it's a good thing that more coverage is given to
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people
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. Henceforth, I've elaborated my views.
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Primarily
, the reason behind more attention given to these
people
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is that
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higher
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a higher
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number of
population
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belong
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to
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the middle
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middle class
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background.
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,
people
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are more
intriged
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intrigued
to look at someone coming from the same class and being rich.
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not only helps with publicity but
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hits
people
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on an emotional level. It highlights the fact that if you're
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determined
to achieve something, nothing can stop you.
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, a movie about an Indian cricketer who came from a backward class and didn't have much support growing up, managed to stay consistent and with
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hard work
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he is now one of the greatest
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of all time.
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makes
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more hopeful of the future. In my
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it is a good thing because
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it encourages
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to be inspired
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others and keep trying their best in
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. Success stories have a different charm when a person goes through countless struggles and still
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succeeds
through it.
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, it
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enhances the importance of having
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perspective. It is not the situation but our response to it which makes the difference. For illustration, the famous story of Alexander, who failed at school and his
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parents
weren't very supportive of him either. Despite
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what he had faced he still managed to make some of the greatest discoveries. When
younger
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the younger
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population read about
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they
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are motivated
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to keep
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growing
and looking forward to
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a good
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. In conclusion, it is a good thing that
media
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the media
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is
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focusing
focussing
more on ordinary
people
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living an extra
ordianry
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ordinary
life
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as
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helps inspire youth to greatness.

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language
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task achievement
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task achievement
The essay presents a clear position on both the interest in ordinary people’s success and why this is beneficial.
task achievement
The use of real-life examples, such as the Indian cricketer and Alexander, adds credibility to the arguments presented.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrity
  • ordinary backgrounds
  • interest
  • curiosity
  • fascination
  • escapism
  • entertainment
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • identification
  • relatability
  • social comparison
  • envy
  • public interest
  • negative effects
  • excessive focus
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