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In many countries nowadays consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a postive or negative development? give resons for your answer and include relevant examples?

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In
present
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the present
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 day
people
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 have
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the oportunity
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oportunity
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opportunity
 to make a purchase in different spots in the world. I
am strongly believe
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strongly believe
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 that
this
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 trend leads to greater
food
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 accessibility and gives a lot of
benefities
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benefits
 to individuals.
that is
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 why In my opinion it positively
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effects to
affects
effectsto
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affects
people
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 First of all, the export production is a result of doing that. It gives more
posabilities
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possibilities
 to humans trying new products or
food
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 that may not be located in their area.
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,
nowdays
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nowadays
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 person who lives in
Antractica
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Antarctica
 is able to taste fruits that grow in Africa,
such
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 as bananas, oranges, and
mango
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mangoes
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. 
This
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suggest
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 that
people
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 will have
larger
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a larger
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 overview
about
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of
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this
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 world.
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Secondly
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 global availability of
food
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engage
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engages
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 individuals to explore new cultures and appreciate other countries,
moreovere
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moreover
, it can unite
people
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 from
whole
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 world. It will be possible to exchange traditional dishes and combine different
natons
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nations
 together.
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, it has another impact
wich
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which
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 is the loss of traditional
cousine
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cuisine
. Mixing their
owen
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own
 traditional dishes
wirh
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with
 others
is leading
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leads
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 to making meals identical. In summary,
although
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this
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 trend can standardize
food
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 it provides export production and is able to unite
people
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language
Ensure proper spelling and grammatical accuracy. For example, 'opportunity' instead of 'oportunidad', 'benefits' instead of 'benefities', and 'effects' instead of 'effectsto'.
structure
Refine your thesis statement for clarity. A clearer statement can help the reader understand your stance more easily.
depth
Provide more specific examples or expand on the points made, particularly regarding the impact of global food availability on cultures.
content
The essay presents relevant arguments regarding food accessibility and cultural appreciation, demonstrating a thoughtful approach to the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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