The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Aliya.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Aliya.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Aliya.
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The bar chart illustrates
datas
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data
about families in one country, where they spent weekly income in percentage.
Overall
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, People
spent
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their
money
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in
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on
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8
criterias
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criteria
, there are food, housing,
fuel
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and
power
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, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure. The most popular way of spending
money
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was food in 1968,
while
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in 2018 it was leisure time activities. The least popular in both periods was
fuel
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and
power
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. In 1968 people spent 35% of their weekly
money
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for
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on
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food,
while
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in 2018 they spent almost twice least of
money
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.
Second
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The second
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popular
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most popular
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was housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
with 10% of their income, in spite of
this
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in 2018, housing was almost twice
.
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as.
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The least was
fuel
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and
power
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with about 7%. In 2018 the
popular
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most popular
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way was leisure time activities with almost 25%. The lowest way to spend
money
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was
fuel
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and
power
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with almost 4 %.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, fuel, power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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