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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featues, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featues, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how much
fish
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,chicken,lamb,and
beef
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 were consumed in a particular European country from 1097 to 2004.
Overall
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, the amount of eaten
beef
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 declined over the given period,
while
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 the chicken
rate
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 rose,
additionally
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, it ranked as the highest by the end of the period. Notably, the
grams
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 of
fish
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 per person ate were stable throughout the years. As the data clearly indicates, the consumption of chicken for one person weekly started
with
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 a
rate
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 below 150
grams
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. In the following years, the line increased gradually, and in 2004 it peaked at over 250.
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, the
beef
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rate
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, which share was the highest at almost 210 in 1979, the amount of
beef
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 eaten weekly decreased between 1997 and 1984. By the end of the prior era, it increased sharply;
this
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 trend continued until 1998;
however
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, in the next twenty years,
the
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beef
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grams
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 consumption had a large reduction as it reached approximately 100, which is almost half of the
rate
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 it recorded in the first year. Moving to the categories that had minor changes were the lamb and
fish
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 category. The lamb, which started at 150
grams
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, experienced a downward trend over the twenty- five period as its share was about 60
grams
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 in 2004. Interestingly, the amount of
fish
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 which was consumed in
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 European country
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 remained relatively stable.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, beef, rate, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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