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In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation

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There is
widespread
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a widespread
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 belief that,in
a
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several countries ,the government give
promotion
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promotions
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 to public
transport
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for
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to
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 decline
private
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in private
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vehicle
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 ownership.
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 essay will describe, the
advantage
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advantages
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 of using public
transport
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 to save people’s financial budget and drawbacks,
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 as
,
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 overcrowded space of public
transport
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,which makes the own
vehicle
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 much more comfortable to use. Public
transport
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 helps individuals to save their money for the future or other staff what they need. Because public
transport
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have
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 stable low cost by the governments and it’s work faster as a means of transportation.
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experiment
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,about what kind of
transport
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 is faster to get from point
a
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 to point B in the
center
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 of the city and it
is
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 proved that public
transport
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 was faster than private
car
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cars
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. The government is responsible for the state and
using
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 of public
transport
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. Because often public
transport
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 is not comfortable transportation for using and have your own private
vehicle
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 better than public
transport
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.
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, in a traffic jam with
large
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 number of people in
megapolis
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a megapolis
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 it is hard to just get inside
the
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a
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vehicle
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due to
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 overpopulation,
the
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and the
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 use of public
transport
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 becomes impossible. In conclusion,I prefer to use
own
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my own
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transport
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 because the comfort suggested by
the
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my
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 own
transport
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mean
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 rather than
saved
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 money from public
transport
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.
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, public
transport
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 provides a better environment to live in green spaces than using private
vehicle
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 ownership. In some countries, the government promotes public
transport
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 as the primary means of transportation and discourages private
vehicle
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 ownership. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 situation

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task achievement
Ensure that your thesis statement clearly encapsulates the main points you will discuss in the essay. This way, readers will know what to expect.
coherence and cohesion
Use transition words (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Moreover', 'In addition') to improve the flow of your ideas and guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid small grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement. For instance, instead of 'transport have', it should be 'transport has'.
task achievement
You clearly identify both advantages and disadvantages of public transport, which addresses the prompt effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion summarizes your personal preference, which adds a personal touch to the discussion, making it more engaging.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • commute
  • carbon emissions
  • economical
  • maintenance
  • overcrowding
  • socio-economic group
  • infrastructure
  • reliability
  • flexibility
  • public policy
  • sustainability
  • personal mobility
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