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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the average sales of Mobile phones, online, consoles and handheld
games
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 over a six-year period from 2000 to 2006. The vertical axis represents the change rate of sales in billions of dollars,
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 the horizontal one depicts the time period.
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, the most popular type was the Handheld
games
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 with the highest parameters during the whole period. The only type which had a negative tendency was console
games
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 with a slight decrease year by year.
Nevertheless
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, console
games
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 were still relatively popular at the beginning. Online
games
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 started to be shown only in 2001 and there was a dramatic increase in their popularity. The
last
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 category which is mobile
games
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 had a gradual positive moment and fluctuated between 0 to approximately 6 billion dollars. Only in 2002, that category appeared on the graph. The highest peak in sales was achieved by handheld
games
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 with 18 billion dollars in 2006,
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 the lowest index was never approached
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 the fact that some categories didn't even exist in some years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games with synonyms.
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