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The plans illustrate the layout of a public library in 20 years ago and its current design after redevelopment.

The plans illustrate the layout of a public library
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20 years ago and its current design after redevelopment.
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,
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while
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the original position of
entrance
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have
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 been preserved and the layout
still
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 unchanged.
However
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, the noticeable changes
about
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 the tables and chairs
on
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 the
center
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 of the hall
is
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 being replaced.
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 some original features have been preserved, others have been upgraded to better serve the public. Standing at the entrance and facing the part, we can see the reading
room
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 involving the newspapers and magazines is replaced by the computer
room
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.
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, the area of adult
fiction
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books
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in
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 on the
left hand
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 side, which has been replaced by all reference
books
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.
And the
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 adult
fiction
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 book has
removed
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 to the
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right hand
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 side of the hall. The original
room
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 for
cds
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CDs
, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games has
replaced
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 by
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room
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 for children’s
fiction
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books
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, which
adding
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 two sofas for relaxing and
create
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creating
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 a place for storytelling events. Near the
right
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 bottom
right
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 corner, the enquiry desks with ticket and book returns which removed and replaced by a café. The top of
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right
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 side has become a lecture
room
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. The area between
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this
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these
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 two
place
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 has added three self-service machines and the information desk
move
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 to here
which
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in front of the machines.
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Finally
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 the Adult
fiction
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books
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 are next to the Lecture
room
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.

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Good effort in identifying and describing various elements of the library's layout.

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