The only way to improve the safety of our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The most possible way to reduce road accidents is by strictly punishing those driving inattentively. I completely agree with
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To begin
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with, it is indeed relevant that accidents and traffic congestion occur
due to
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the
carelesness
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carelessness
of the driver. As, many
drivers
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often cross minimum speed on roads and often
forgets
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to wear seatbelts
as well as
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helmets
thus
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, resulting in severe accidents and injuries. Making traffic
law
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strict with rigid punishment will enhance safety
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driving.
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, Kerala transport authorities
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placed
camera
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cameras
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all over the city to monitor
drivers
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who are not wearing seatbelts and helmets with fine charges
therby
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thereby
,
people
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tend to be more vigilant in driving. To add on, there are
people
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who
drives
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drive
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even when they are drunk or without having
proper
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a proper
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driving license especially
the
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those
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under 18. These
kind
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of
people
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are the main
culprints
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culprits
in making multiple
collison
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collisions
on the routes thereby, making it hard for other
drivers
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and passengers.
Punishining
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Punishing
them precisely can make a good change in their driving.
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, Indian police officers often patrol in
city
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the city
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during
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apply
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late
night
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at night
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to catch
drivers
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drunk and often punish them
over
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for over
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a month by
restricitng
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restricting
them
to drive
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from driving
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,
this
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act makes
people
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more alert to not drive
while
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drunk. They
also
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punish those parents who give their motor
vehicle
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vehicles
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to under 18 by
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also
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blocking the
parents
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license
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as a
punishement
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punishment
.
To conclude
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, the best method to stop road injury is by harshly punishing those driving
reckless
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recklessly
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. I completely agree with
this
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statement as punishing them for their mistakes will make them more attentive
while
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driving.

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Grammar
Be careful with grammar and spelling; correct words like 'carelesness' to 'carelessness' and 'punishining' to 'punishing'.
Structure
Improve the logical flow by linking ideas more smoothly and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
Example Support
Ensure that examples directly support your claims more explicitly.
Conclusion
Expand the conclusion by briefly summarizing the points made in the essay.
Tense Usage
Be mindful of using consistent verb tenses throughout your essay.
Argument Clarity
You've clearly stated your agreement with the statement and provided a relevant viewpoint.
Example Usage
Your examples from real-life situations, such as the Kerala transport authorities, add strength to your argument.
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