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The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure,business and commercial purpose around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flight should be texted more?

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In
this
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 technical world, everyone is in
rush
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a rush
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 to gain success and live later life
comfortabely
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comfortably
. Nowadays, it is a cup of tea to cover huge miles within a short
time
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 period with the help of
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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 number of flights. If something gives benefits to us
then
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 we can not
denay
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deny
to
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it to
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 face its drawbacks. There are multifarious pros and cons of
this
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air
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 transport and I am going to discuss
briefly
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them briefly
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 in upcoming paragraphs.
According to
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 me, flying should be sent more
texted
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 to overcome their
passengers
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passenger's
passengers'
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 stress
level
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levels
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. To commence, aeroplanes play a vital role
to convert
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in converting
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whole
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the whole
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 universe into a village.
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, now is possible to have breakfast in
south
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the south
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 corner and enjoy dinner
in
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on
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an
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the
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 opposite side of the world. It happens with the help of
enormous
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an enormous
the enormous
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 number of planes.
Moreover
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, a person can gain a lot of knowledge about distinct cultures, values, and religions.
This
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 is the reason that he
have
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has
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good
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a good
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 platform to spend
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his vocation
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vocation
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vacation
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 in another country. To exemplify, in 2023, a survey
had
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was
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 conducted in India to assess the
students
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student
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 ratio who did study in other nations. Evidence showed that 65% Indian population is qualified from foreign institutes
due to
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convenience
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the convenience
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 of flights. On the other side, noise and
air
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 pollution is a big problem here. More number of
journey
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journeys
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 by
air
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 means
high
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the high
a high
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 density of
air
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 pollution. It directly leads to some respiratory ailments in children. Accidents
is
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are
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 another noticeable issue because sometimes more than 1 aeroplane is scheduled to land
on
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at
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same
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the same
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 airport at
same
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the same
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time
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.
That is
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 why they crash and
gives
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give
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 birth to mortality and morbidity among travellers.
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last
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 month
on
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at
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 Toronto
pearson
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Pearson
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 airport, 79 people lost their own
life
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lives
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 just in 15 seconds
due to
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the mismatch
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mismatch
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mismatched
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 timing of land
in
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on
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 both planes. It is a serious issue and everyone
have
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has
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 to focus on it. I think
,
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apply
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 flights need to send more
texted
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texts
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 to create awareness among
pulbic
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public
 about
time
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, place, boarding
time
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 and so on.
To conclude
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, everything comes with merits and demerits. Undoubtedly,
is
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it
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 is
a
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the
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 best way to achieve knowledge, refresh
mind
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the mind
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, and utilize spare
time
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 in an appropriate manner but can not ignore
cons
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its cons
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of
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apply
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it
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apply
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.

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task achievement
Strengthen your introduction by clearly stating the advantages and disadvantages you will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clearer logical flow between paragraphs to enhance coherence; use linking phrases effectively.
task achievement
Provide a bit more detail in your examples, particularly to support your points about noise and air pollution.
task achievement
The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of flights, showcasing a balanced perspective.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural exchange
  • Tourism
  • Economic growth
  • Aviation industry
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Noise pollution
  • Infrastructure strain
  • Taxation
  • Affordability
  • Sustainable aviation technology
  • Revenue
  • Climate change
  • Local economies
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