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The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.

The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.
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The data presents the number of rides per one thousand Chinese who owned a car from 1987 to 1999.
Overall
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, The number of china residents who have a vehicle rose steadily throughout the period .
In addition
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 , it is the highest that over been .
Whereas
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, there is a little increase between 1991 and 1995 despite
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the years before .
According to
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 what is shown , 1987 has the lowest amount of people who are from China with a private vehicle with less than 500 rides. After 1987 there was a fluctuating growth and the number reached more than 500 motors in 1991 . In terms of , 1995 the data reached a new goal of more than 2500 rides owned by a Chinese resident . After the year 1995, the data had a huge climb , especially in 1999 . 1999 had the biggest amount of Chinese who owned a car with more than 4500 private cars.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • vehicle ownership
  • per 1000 people
  • economic growth
  • rising income
  • year-on-year increase
  • significant jumps
  • data points
  • urbanization
  • industrialization
  • infrastructural impact
  • environmental impact
  • plateau
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