The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams depict the transformation of
grange
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Grange Park
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park
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from 1920 to today.
Overall
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, there are major changes in monuments and institutions. In 1920, there were five seats in
this
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park
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,
whereas
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those were relocated and four seats have gathered at the
center
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centre
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of the
park
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. A fountain, which was located
on
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in
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the
center
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, has
removed
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been removed
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, and a rose garden has
placed
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there today. On the right of the
park
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, a pond for water plants
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demolished, and the area is used for children's playground today.
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, an old rose garden
have
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been replaced with a cafe, and a glasshouse has been converted into a water feature. On the left side, there were two rose gardens in 1920.
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, one of the gardens has
demolished
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. In 1920, musicians played
at
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the stage,
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while
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and
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it
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changed into
Amphitheatre
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an Amphitheatre
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for concerts. In 1920, there was no car
park
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in
this
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park
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, though visitors can use
underground
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the underground
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car
park
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,
which
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entrance is located
at
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the right side of the
park
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.

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Task Response
Ensure that your introduction provides a clear overview of the main changes and trends. You might include phrases that indicate there are overarching themes in the changes.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using linking words and phrases to enhance the flow. For instance, 'in addition' or 'however' can help clarify comparisons or contrasts between the two time periods.
Task Response
Aim to provide more detailed descriptions and specific examples for the features mentioned. For example, specifying what kinds of flowers were in the old rose garden might add depth.
Content
The essay does a good job of identifying several key changes in the park's layout over the years, including the relocation of seating and the introduction of new features.

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