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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and pie charts illustrate
police
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the police
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budget
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getting
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from various sources and
an
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the
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 amount of
money
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 spent on each purpose in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.
Overall
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, more than half of the total
budget
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 in both years came from the national government. The proportion of the
money
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 allocated to both years was the same, showing the top spending on salaries. In terms of the sources of funds, the national government gave a similar amount of
money
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 which was around 175 million pounds each year, making it the biggest contributor.
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, the
budget
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 from other sources remained at the same level around 38 million pounds. Local taxes,
conversely
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, showed a significant increase from 91.2 to 102.3 million pounds, directly contributing
in
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to
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a
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the
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 growth of the total
budget
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. For
money
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 allocation,
although
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 salaries were the dominant group in 2017 and 2018, accounting for around 70% of the total
budget
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, a moderate decrease in proportion was observed.
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, the
money
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 spent on technology was only
at
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apply
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8% in 2017, it grew to 14% in 2018. Building and transport got the same percentage of the
toal
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total
budget
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 at 17% throughout the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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