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Band 3

In the future, all cars, buses, and tracks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

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As technology is growing very fast, myriad
car
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 producers keep to
inovate
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innovate
 their product and
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 it
to
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 the
real world
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 scenario. One of the most groundbreaking
innovation
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 is the
driverless
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 vehicle that can operate the machine by a computer system, not a driver.
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dicovery
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discovery
 on cars industry
bring
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 some positives and negatives among many aspects. On the one hand,
driverless
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car
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 can save human power and likely can get rid of driver's mistake probability.
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by
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integrating the computer system
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 the highway can make the traffic more tidy and
save
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.
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 opportunity can used by the services company,
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 as taxi and bus provider to reduce their spending on the workforce.
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,
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 phenomenon may lead to
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setback
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of
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 job availability and redundancy
to
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 the employee.
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this
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 matter would create a bigger issue
which
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demonstration
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 and
demanding
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 from the affected side.
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,
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driverless
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the driverless
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car
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 is not away from dangers, especially the potential of system
malfuction
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malfunction
malfunctions
 that can threaten
passengers
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passengers'
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 life.
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,
the
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innovation in
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 operation can enhance traffic safety and tidiness.
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, the drawback of it can lead to a bigger problem that can hit the industry. So, in order to avoid the disaster caused by
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 innovation, there should be
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a proper check and recheck regarding the operation of
driverless
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vehicle
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vehicles
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Provide a clearer introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates back to the main thesis.
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Consider using more specific examples to support your points, such as statistical data or real-life scenarios regarding driverless vehicles.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling, as small mistakes can distract from your main ideas.
task achievement
You presented both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showing a balanced view on the topic.
task achievement
The essay maintains a clear focus on the impact of driverless technology, making it relevant and engaging.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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