Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Certain individuals believe that male and female students should get
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in different subjects.
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the opposite side, some believe that all
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the same subjects. That's the main topic I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs and I will give my opinion with rationale and specifics.
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will not give fun to the student. In the game
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, mechanics and plumbers which help them to get complementation
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which help them to get employment and help them shape their future in contact trades. In
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which are more, do complements the
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help and make
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planned
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women
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planned within amounts of girls and planned within amounts of girls and
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people hate
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. Their point of view is somewhat right.
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of view is somewhat right,
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because their institute is fully
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of both
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should champion and talk together. In some aspects,
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of both
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with the opposite
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society. If it was in the same class as in the
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they you have to deal with our
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only concentrates
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equipment in the
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not
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reported in the study.
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opportunities for other people better than the boy. Children who
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in school, planned
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the grooming of the child to adapt together
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to both the sexes. It recognizes and differentiates views but I believe that it can be better to get education from the same school for all
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task response
The introduction states the topic but lacks a clear thesis statement. Ensure to outline both views more distinctly and present your opinion clearly towards the end of the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
The coherence between the ideas can be improved. Use linking words effectively to connect your points logically. For instance, transition phrases like 'On one hand,' and 'On the other hand,' could help.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, discussing benefits of mixed versus single-gender schooling with research or statistics could strengthen your points.
task response
You clearly attempt to present both sides of the argument, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the main ideas effectively and states your opinion, which is a good approach.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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