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he charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two line graphs illustrate the percentage of
households
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 that owned three electrical
appliances
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 (washing
machines
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, refrigerators, and
vacuum
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 cleaners) and the average number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per week in a particular country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, the proportion of
households
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 with electrical
appliances
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 increased significantly, with refrigerators and
vacuum
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 cleaners becoming more common than washing
machines
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. At the same time, the amount of time spent on
housework
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 declined sharply. In 1920, only 30% of
households
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 owned
vacuum
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 cleaners,
while
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 40% had washing
machines
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. No household had a refrigerator at that time. Over the following decades, ownership of all three
appliances
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 rose. Refrigerator ownership saw the most dramatic increase, reaching 60% by 1960 and 100% by 1980, after which it remained unchanged.
Vacuum
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 cleaner ownership followed a similar pattern, reaching full adoption by 2000.
In contrast
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, washing
machines
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 experienced slower growth, increasing to just over 70% by 2019. Meanwhile, the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per week declined steadily. In 1920,
households
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 spent around 50
hours
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 on
housework
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, but
this
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 figure dropped significantly to 20
hours
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 by 1960. The decline continued, reaching just 10
hours
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 per week by 2019, likely
due to
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 the widespread use of electrical
appliances
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, appliances, machines, vacuum, hours, housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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