some people think that school work need competation and cooperation

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different
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they have to face it and
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jump
on these obstacles.
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seen
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as good in different aspects of
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that
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, others
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that
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is better,
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both views.
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hand, some believe that
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way to have the best achievement in work
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same project with two teams.
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the
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between students is good to see them compete and get the best of them.
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as parenting, parents can use
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technique to get the mission done. From my own perspective view I noticed that
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is better sometimes to
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in some challenges.
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the other hand, some people believe
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is better than
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helps
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to have good sense and
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about
other
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feelings. Many projects consist of phases it is dependent on
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rather than
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to finalize it well.
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,
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in
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sometimes the
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students to present
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way. In conclusion, both
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and
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are essential to deal with problems in
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explores the person
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the individual deal with others to finish some tasks. My personal view
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competition
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and
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needed
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by
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task achievement
Try to present clearer arguments for each point and explain the reasons behind each viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammar and vocabulary to improve clarity and precision.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is important in IELTS essays.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main points well, providing a clear end to your essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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