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The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six subjects at a US university in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six subjects at a US university in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart presents the number of research
students
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, divided by gender, who
pursue
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pursued
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 different
subjects
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 in 2005. These
subjects
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 included
linguistics
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,
psychology
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, natural
sciences
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, engineering, programming and
mathematics
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.
Overall
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, there were more male than female research
students
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 in the given year. Among all the
subjects
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, male
students
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 had a higher enrolment than female
students
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 except for
linguistics
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.
Although
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 both
gender
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genders
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 took a strong interest in
psychology
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 and natural
sciences
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, two of the most popular
subjects
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, men least preferred
linguistics
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 and women
mathematics
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. Female and male
students
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 showed a more or less similar interest in
linguistics
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,
psychology
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 and natural
sciences
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.
In particular
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, natural
sciences
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 was the most popular of all, showing the same enrolment number of 200. Though very popular,
psychology
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 was
favored
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favoured
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 more by men(200) than women (around 170). In
linguistics
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, the situation was the reserve, with more women than men.
However
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, female and male
students
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shows
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show
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 significant differences in engineering, programming and
mathematics
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. In all three
subjects
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, male
diminance
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dominance
 was obvious, especially in
mathematics
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, which was taken by 200 male
students
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 and only around 40 female
students
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. In
engineeing
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engineering
 and programming, the number of female
students
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 was
rooughly
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roughly
 half of that
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of male
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male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, subjects, linguistics, psychology, sciences, mathematics with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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