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The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002.

The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of river quality in the 4 distinct parts of
UK
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 from 1990 to 2002. Looking at
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overall
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 structure,it is readily apparent that,there was an increase in three countries,with the exception of
Wales
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,
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 experienced a slight reduction in the given years.
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,in
initial
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the initial
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 period
Wales
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 was observed as the highest indication,
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 reversed position with Northern Ireland
at the end
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Wales
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,the rate of water quality was accounted for at roughly 95% and remained
stability
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to
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 1998.Afterward,there
was
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underwent a decrease from 95% in 1998 to 80% in 2002.As for Northern England,there
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 was demonstrated steadiness from 1990 to 1998.In
constract
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contrast
contract
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,Northern England
faced
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a
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growth until the end and reached
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95%. In terms of England,the percentage was begun approximately at 45%,
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 witnessed a considerable and
steadiy
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steady
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 rise to 70% in 1996,
while
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 it
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observed a
dramatically
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 decline to 30% in 1998 and until the end experienced a
gradually
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 increase.Regards to
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Scotland,the level of good river quality started nearly at 22%,rose slightly to 30% in 1992,
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 stayed the same
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 1996,
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 continued with growth to 60% in 2000 and reduced to 40% in the ultimate period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words wales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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