The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday on the weekend, in 2019

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The bar chart illustrates the number of daily visitors to six specific attractions in Canberra, either on the week or on the

weekend

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, in 2019.

It is clear that

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the highest proportions of people visiting these places were seen on a

weekend

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day.

Overall

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, the most frequently, citizens preferred cafes and restaurants (combined), shopping centres, and parks,

whereas

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movie theatres, museums, and libraries they picked less frequently. Notably

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the same preferences are seen on the week,

as well as

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on the

weekend

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. Focusing first on the most popular entertainment, by far the highest figures were observed in cafes/restaurants on a weekday, with 150 visitors

then

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whereas

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for parks and shopping centres, the corresponding proportions were between 90 and 100 people. During the week, 90, 50, and 60 residents picked these attractions, respectively. With regard to the remaining places, 80 of those living in Canberra went to movie theatres,

whereas

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nearly 65 and approximately half as much visited local museums and libraries on the day of a

weekend

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. As for the

weekday

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weekdays

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, roughly 20 people went to museums and libraries,

while

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almost 50% more were seen in movie theatres.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words weekend with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

188 words

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The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday on the weekend, in 2019

Some people think the government should provide free housing, while others believe it is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not have strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?