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Band 4.5

Cars come in all different shapes and sizes. Some prefer a large one, while others a compact one. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each type and which would you prefer?

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Vehicles play a significant role in facilitating
peoples'
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people's
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 lives.
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this
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 reason, Many people believe that owning a
big size
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big-size
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 four wheels four-wheel-drive
car
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 is important,
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 others think a small
car
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 is enough to serve their needs. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the positive and negative impacts of both types.
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, I will explain why I recommend a vehicle with minimum load capacity rather than a huge
one
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.
Firstly
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, Extended families with a large number of family members need to have
a
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transportion
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transportation
 facilities that not only help them to move from
a
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 place to another but
also
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 reduce the number of trips when
traveling
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travelling
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.
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, my friend lives with her mother, father, sisters, brothers, and their kids. When they went to a restaurant in Toronto, they could all go together in
one
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car
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 with no need to make two trips, which saves money, time, and energy. In
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 case,
this
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 shows a great impact on the community
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 they
also
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 stress that
one
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 trip will cause less damage
for
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environment
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 and reduce the traffic jam in the big cities.
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, those who favour the small vehicles' capacity emphasize that people should follow a healthy lifestyle and limit their dependency on technology to move from
one
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 place to another.
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, my father is 60 years old, and he always chooses to walk
for
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 shopping as he strongly believes that it is not only improving his health well
being
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well-being
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 but
also
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maitain
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maintaining
a
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apply
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friendly
the
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environmental habits.
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as
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 a result, a mini economical
car
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 is enough to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the basic needs. In my opinion, saving money and purchasing a small
car
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have
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 more
healthu
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healthier
 effect on
indiviuals
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individuals
 and society.
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, I suggest that governments may reduce the cost of the mini transportation machines to encourage people
saving
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 their money and community.

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language
Ensure all sentences are complete and grammatical. For example, 'transportion facilities' should be 'transportation facilities'.
structure
Make sure to introduce your main points clearly in your introduction and to summarize them in your conclusion.
lexical resource
Consider varying your vocabulary. Instead of repeating 'small car', use synonyms or describe features.
content
Your examples are relevant and help illustrate your points well, providing a clear understanding of your argument.
task
Your writing reflects a clear opinion and recommendation on the type of vehicle preferred, which aligns well with the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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