Many people try to look younger than their age. What are the causes people do this. Do you think this is a good thing or bad thing?”

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In the prevailing era, physical appearance has become a notable part of the body.
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people try different ways to look like they are younger.
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factors behind
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provide my viewpoint. I think it is a positive trend that helps
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to keep
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healthy and fit. Commencing with the most salient reason why individuals have become more conscious towards their age is
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personal insecurity. Some
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are afraid of getting old. They think that if they become old, they
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die soon.
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the reason they use tremendous cosmetic products to make their look
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younger.
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, looking younger can help to find their soulmate. Some
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visit many places,
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as pubs, clubs, and many more and they can find their partner easily in
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places if they look
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attractive
. I believe that
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phenomenon brings many benefits to every human.
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, mankind
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become more
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conscious.
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health
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food,
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as fruits,
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vegetables
, and nuts has become a habit among them. They are more likely to avoid junk foods that
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their
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health
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.
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, countless problems have been eliminated,
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as obesity,
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and cardiovascular
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diseases.
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, there are two main reasons
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looking younger than their age, one is fear
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getting old and the second is to
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their partner. I
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contemplate
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that it is not a pervasive trend that
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them to remain
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health
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healthy
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in their life.

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grammar
Make sure to use accurate articles and quantifiers; for example, 'the most of people' should be 'most people.' Also, check sentence structure and grammar for clarity.
examples
Try to provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and enhance the clarity of ideas presented.
organization
Improve the organization of ideas; each paragraph should clearly relate back to the main topic and contain a single focus.
content
You provided a personal viewpoint, which enhances the essay's emotional connection and engagement.
structure
Your introduction effectively sets up the topic and gives the reader an idea of what to expect in the essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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  • Stability
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