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Band 5.5

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter • explain why you changed jobs • describe your new job • tell himlher your other news

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Dear Jimmy, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in
pink
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 of health. I am writing you in reference to your letter which
i
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 received yesterday asking more about my current
job
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 scenarios. There are several reasons for flipping over jobs
due to
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 lack of appropriate salary package, insufficient growth in the company, navigating to a far place for marketing purposes and many more. Ultimately, I made a decision to change new
Job
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. I was interviewed at Blue High Hotel as Team
leader
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 of Hotel Management at the Lakeshore location. The
Job
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 duties are quite familiar to my las to
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last
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job
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 as team lead at Manchok Suites Inn. My duties are supervising the on-shift team members, rotating their lunch breaks, customer sheet check-in-outs, etc.
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, I would love to inform you that my sister
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was awarded as the National
champion
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 in her Final round as she won the match with five strong competitors.
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, I am planning to visit her next summer and it would be great if you could join me too for the trip to Jaisalmer. I am eagerly waiting for your response. Yours Loving, Tina

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using paragraphs to clearly separate different ideas. For example, you can have one paragraph for reasons for changing jobs and another for describing your new job.
task achievement
Make sure to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. While your friendly tone is good, be careful with some informal phrases that might not fit entirely well.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, it would be nice to include a closing line that invites a reply or expresses your excitement about your friend's response.
task achievement
Your letter has a friendly and warm tone, which is great for a letter to a friend!
task achievement
You provided clear reasons for changing jobs and a description of your new role, demonstrating a good understanding of the task requirements.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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