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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have been living in an apartment for the last three years. A few problems have emerged in your apartment since the last repair. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, give details of the last repair work what the problems are now how you would like the landlord to solve these problems You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ......................,

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Dear Mr. John, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter in connection with the recent repair. As you know
that
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apply
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we
are
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have been
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 living there
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 three years,
we
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and we
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 always keep things in good
conditions
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condition
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 because we treat the rental apartment as our own house. Recently, we faced
problem
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a problem
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 in
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 area and it
is
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was
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 resolved
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such
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as there was something that
stuck
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was stuck
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 in the sink and water coming out from there and
pipe
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the pipe
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 under
sink
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the sink
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also
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 leaked. Despite
it
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this
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, there are several issues that we are facing on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. The temperature of our house is not accurate, it fluctuates automatically.
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, some burners suddenly stop working and start after some it,
it
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which
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 is dangerous for us.
Although
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, the pipe under
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 sink
repaired
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was repaired
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but
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it's troubling again. It would be really appreciated if you would call someone for repair because it makes things messy.
Firstly
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, you would check the problem and try to fix it else you would call the plumber and a person
for setting
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to set
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 the temperature. I am looking forward to your prompt response. Your Faithfully, Manjinder Kaur

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task achievement
The letter could benefit from a clearer introduction to the issues you are facing. Consider stating the problems more clearly at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group related issues in separate paragraphs; it would help improve clarity. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that verb tenses are consistent. For example, in 'we are living there from last three years,' it should be 'we have been living here for the last three years.'
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone, which is essential in a correspondence with a landlord.
task achievement
You provided specific examples of the problems that need attention, which is important for effective communication.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • repair work
  • landlord
  • maintenance
  • issues
  • inconvenience
  • urgency
  • cracked walls
  • faulty heating
  • leaky faucet
  • timeline
  • professionals
  • adequately
  • commence
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